Joel’s Comments on my Story
Hello [Joel].
Yes, I see what you mean about the too-much-too-soon approach. I wrote this about two and a half years ago, and even to me today, it seems a bit amateurish. Perhaps I’ll redraft it for a better effect and make it into more of a mystery as well as eliminate some redundancies. Thanks!
I’ll try reading the “It’s Only A Game” poem once more, in light of your comments. Perhaps it will make a different impression.
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Later,
Tom Hesley