Updating Joel
[Joel],
Hi there. I haven’t forgotten about you. I’ve been busy reworking the Lady-In-The-Park story, removing redundancies and rearranging the presentation to achieve the mysterious building effect you suggested. I hope to have a new draft done by the end of October.
I’m giving a 35-minute talk to 125 people at a Lions Club convention in mid November. I’ll speak about the camp, from a (my) camper’s perspective. I’ve never spoken to so many people for so long before. So I’ve been writing and rewriting the presentation to make sure every detail fits well. In short, I’ve been so busy with this that I haven’t worked on the park story as much as I’d like. But shortly, I would like you to read the new draft again and see if it flows in a more riveting way.
Hope all is well with you.
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Later,
Tom Hesley